Snippet Sunday - Little Beginnings 15/03/2015 #Reading #WIP

 
 
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LITTLE BEGINNINGS
 
Jeri lives in Hobart where she owns a gallery. Since her divorce, many years ago, she's finally ready to "be" with a man again. But finding the right one seems to be harder than she thought.
 
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Scott looked down at Jeri through eyes the colour of chocolate brown. She stared at him. He was about the same height as Ely, his hair was a dirty blond rather than dark and the ends curled up like fish hooks around the edge of the hat.
She thought, Ely had been the highlight of her day, but Scott evidently came from the same gene pool.
Or at least similar.
Jeri was still unable to speak but when she noticed him raising his eyebrow, she forced herself to shake his hand.
“Thank God, you’re here,” she said with a croaky voice.
He smiled again, and she nearly had to hold on to something or at least lock her knees.
She continued to stare at him as he took in the situation.
“Any major damage?” he asked
And that’s when she stopped comparing him to her carpenter. Her stare turned into a glare and with hands on hips she said, “Not at all. I simply wanted to meet you.”
 
 
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28 comments:

  1. LOL I love her sarcasm. That'll help her keep her head. Great snippet, Iris. :)

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  2. I can't tell if he's not that bright or she's just a tad prickly (not that she doesn't have good reason)! Either way, I love her wit! :)

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    1. :-) I suppose "major damage" is very subjective. A bucket of water in my kitchen would be a major drama for me, whereas I suppose for some men they need to be knee deep in water before they get flustered ;-)
      I appreciate your comment, and I'd better re-write the scene a little to clarify that a bit.
      Thanks Sarah !!

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  3. I love it. She's entitled to a bit of sarcasm here. I saw on another page that you asked what a wifebeater was. It's a man's undershirt that looks like a woman's camisole but is maybe cut lower. They are sometimes associated with rough, uncouth guys.

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    1. Thanks Elaine ... and thanks for explaining the wifebeater. I had never heard of it.

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  4. LOL! I love it! I've been known to bite back similar responses.

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    1. LOL ... I have a feeling you two are very alike! :-)

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  5. I love the snarkiness of her last line like, duh, Captain Obvious...
    I'm not sure how I feel about this part of his description "ends curled up like fish hooks around the edge of the hat" - curling up is one thing but the fish hooks doesn't make it sound like I would want to run my fingers through his hair. Good snippet.

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    1. Thanks Chelle ... and thanks for the comment about the hair. I will re-write the hair bit, to make it less "hook - like" :-) Much appreciated!

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  6. Oh my, she definitely knows how to handle these guys and make them run away. Same gene pools, hum interesting.

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  7. I'm so giddy reading this snippet! She's saucy straight to the point!

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    1. Hahaha ... glad you like it :-) Thanks Cecilia.

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  8. Love the gal's display of sarcasm! Great snippet!!

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  9. What a question for him to ask! I can see why she stopped paying attention to his looks and got annoyed about then LOL. Excellent excerpt!

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    1. it's on the tip of my tongue to say "Men!", but I'd better not :-D - thanks Veronica!

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  10. I'm wth Veronica, what a question!

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  11. Ah, reacting with attitude! That will throw him off the scent. Can't let him know she's interested. :)

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  12. Chocolate brown eyes... My wife refers to my eyes as, "chocolate". Very nice snippet.

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    1. She's a little romantic it seems :-)

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