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Snippet Sunday - My current WIP "Every Mile of the Way" 08/06/2014



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The story so far is, Sadie, born and raised in Australia, found her grandma's diary after her mother's passing. Intrigued by the diary and her mother's German background, she's on her way to Germany to meet her family over there. 
 
 
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About an hour later I sit back in an airplane going through all the same procedures as twelve hours earlier – storing away my on-board luggage in the overhead locker after taking out all the things I need right next to me and trying to make myself comfortable in my tiny seat next to the window (which is useless because it’s midnight and there’s not a thing to see in the distance). I steal a couple of glances around, but there’s no Toby.

He excused himself as we walked to the boarding gate. I assumed he had to visit the little boys’ room. One could say, that’s when I lost him, but I suppose Mum would argue I’d lost him when accusing him of picking up girls.

Mum! Pain cuts right through my heart and a sudden longing for her rises within me.

Have my words been plain rude? Or did I just freak out because a man, other than David was flirting with me?

 

 
Thank you all for your support and kind comments.
 I do appreciate each single one of them!
 
 
 

 
 
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10 comments:

  1. Interesting self analysis that reveals a lot about the character. Well done.

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  2. I keep expecting him to plop down in the seat next to her...

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  3. Lots of questions. Eventually answers will arise.
    Nice 8!

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  4. This is good. You continue to use the present tense in a very effective way...

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    1. Thank you - I appreciate your kind words!

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  5. Lots of stuff going on in that snippet. A very in-depth look at her character for so few sentences. Great excerpt!
    History Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders

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    1. Thank you Cindy. Really appreciate your kind words!

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