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FRESH BEGINNINGS
We continue with Fresh Beginnings, Jared's story as he travels through five states
in the US in a Motorhome. I used our itinerary from our US travels two years ago
and wrote a romance story around in.
Jared has just arrived in the US.
Enjoy!
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in the US in a Motorhome. I used our itinerary from our US travels two years ago
and wrote a romance story around in.
Jared has just arrived in the US.
Enjoy!
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She turned
to get into the motorhome, and he took in her small stature and the narrow shoulders
which seemed even smaller in her tight, red T-shirt. Jared noticed her cargoes
were just hanging onto her hips. A nice steak wouldn't go astray on these hips.
Suddenly she stopped and moved to look at him. "Thank you," she
whispered.
"No
worries mate."
Jared held
her gaze and wasn't quite sure what to say or do. She simply stood in front of
him like frozen.
"My
name is Ivy," she said after a long moment.
"Hedera.
An evergreen climbing or ground-creeping woody plant in the family Araliaceae."
With a
frown, she stared at him. "I really didn't understand that
one."
He
laughed. "Sorry, mate. I got carried away. I'm a landscaper. Ivy is a
climbing plant." Scratching the back of his head, he added, slightly
self-conscious, "And, of course, a beautiful name."
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Thanks for all your comments,
I do appreciate each single one of them!
Loved the nervous banter, and the glimpse of the budding attraction.You also gave a little background about Jared. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen. I appreciate you stopping by.
DeleteNice snippet. I think you really bring out the feelings going on--nervousness, along with awkwardness. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for stopping by as well as your kind words, Teresa.
DeleteI really liked the way he went on about the climbing plant and loved it when he said the name was beautiful. This was a very nice moment between them.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Chelle :-)
DeleteThat's a nice one. At least he didn't go for the beautiful name compliment straight away. So funny.
ReplyDelete:-) Thanks Linda.
DeleteAnd if he's not a serial rapist or killer, that self introduction should make her swoon. It did me. :)
ReplyDeleteMy job here is done. Glad you liked it, Gem.
DeleteWhat Chelle said.
ReplyDeleteNice 8!
Thanks Frank. :-)
DeleteI love the awkwardness---it's so endearing! :)
ReplyDeleteOf all your heroes, I think Jared could be my favorite.
Aww ... I'm glad you like him. He was so easy "to write" :-)
DeleteThat was sweet and romantic, and I love it even more that she didn't get it at first. That made the complement better. :
ReplyDeleteLoved his comment, really helps me know him (and I like him)! Fun snippet...
ReplyDeleteThank you Veronica ... glad you liked it.
DeleteI love that the bit about it being a beautiful name came almost as an afterthought, like he's not quite sure about what to do or say around her. It's cute. (I love that he wants to feed her. LOL)
ReplyDeleteLOL re the feeding .... thank you so much for your comment, PT. I appreciate it.
DeleteThis felt exactly like such a meeting in the real world, lots of awkwardness between two strangers.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great compliment, thank you Elaine.
DeleteI have to agree with PT, I love how the beautiful name is like an after thought. You make their encounter really genuine between two strangers. I love his nervous reply of what Ivy is, too. That's genius. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteWow ... I'm really humbled by your kind comment. Thank you so much !!
DeleteThat was a cute snippet. So playful. I love it.
ReplyDeletethank you Cecilia. Glad you liked it.
DeleteSome very good lines here-- specifically the steak line and the last lines.
ReplyDeleteSome?? LOL ... Thanks Jeff.
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